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=//Creative Writing//=

EMILY DICKINSON!!!!!!!! I found the other three poems that I wanted to read with you. Try "syntactic doubling", (read the poems backwards) just for fun and tell me what you think! We'll read them on Wednesday!

A nearness to Tremendousness -- An Agony procures -- Affliction ranges Boundlessness -- Vicinity to Laws

Contentment's quiet Suburb -- Affliction cannot stay In Acres -- Its location Is Illocality -- - This was a poet -- It is That Distills amazing sense From ordinary Meanings -- And Attar so immense

From the familiar species That perished by the Door -- We wonder it was not Ourselves Arrested it -- before --

Of Pictures, the Discloser -- The Poet -- it is He -- Entitles Us -- by Contrast -- To ceaseless Poverty --

Of Portion -- so unconscious -- The robbing -- could not harm -- Himself -- to Him -- a Fortune -- Exterior -- to Time -- --- Tell all the Truth but tell it slant -- Success in Circuit lies Too bright for our infirm Delight The Truth's superb surprise As Lightning to the children eased With explanation kind The Truth must dazzle gradually Or every man be blind -- ---

The poems and responses are absolutely fabulous! I am so enjoying reading them all! (I wish I had time to comment on them ALL... I am trying to comment on at least one poem from each person!)

Don't forget to bring in your permission slip for Friday's field trip! :) Love, Mrs. Lax.

spider crossing his web to devour his prey fly stuck in the complex strings of life spider approaching fly fluttering its wings wings still fluttering hope is never taken always present hope to escape hope to live that is until the spider tears hope into pieces leaving absolutely nothing except space for another fly -shay

Here we are again, cold ground, cracked mud Laying with you, warm touch, soft skin my head pressed against your chest the trees are still while flowers sway our shadows reflect one, but are clearly two there you are again, car loud, steets quiet waiting for me, door silent, stairs creaking i open the car door sliding in driving off fast as the world around stays slow getting out my shadow is one missing two here i am again, my clothes lost, an empty bed slip under the covers, icy sheets, toes tingle i drift to sleep, turning off the light both shadows gone, but still missing two -Blaze

Hopes Translation

Something Something like oxygen Living for it Breathing for it Getting nothing Give me something I’m suffocating I’m mistinterpritating Dying Living for a breath It’s part the fear of death Trying to dig through the nothing Finding nothing in the nothing Give me something Not just this complex nothing I am holding on Until it breaks dawn Fearing the shadow My shadow Your shadow Life’s shadow Turn your backs Leave it in the tracks The fear It will stay near Holding on your feet As you hear its dark heart beat Know Its before me, before what’s you Its before him, before what’s true If you understand Take it by the hand Breathe out

-theonlymax1000